I wrote this back in 2013 for a competition. It was tell a 50 word flash fiction story. I ended up entering using another story. But thought I would share this to see what people think.
Water ran underneath the door, as he pushed it open. He stepped onto the bathmat, but it didn’t squelch. The mirror showed him what it had witnessed on that violent night. He stared with horror into the bathtub. His own lifeless face stared back from the bottom of the water.
That’s an excellent 50 words. I like how your foreshadow the ending with the description of the bath mat.
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Thanks for the feedback and taking the time to read it. I might try and write more flash fiction pieces.
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